Progress 18th March

In today's lesson, I first handed Tim's feedback back to him so he could read it and change his article accordingly, and I received my feedback back from Mike, and Philippa sent it to me by email which was helpful. Loz still has not given us any feedback as he was not in today which means we should have more soon.

Here is Philippa's feedback, and a closer look at our personal feedback is shown below.

Overall, I personally thought this feedback was helpful, Me and Matt L will also work on adding some more text to the article ourselves as we did not realise the statistics etc overweighed the amount of our own writing. We did not want to put much of our own opinion in the article as we thought this would not be helpful, so we mainly focused on statistics and data to back up any points the student could make in the critical perspectives exam.

However, we will work on adding a bit more writing ourselves and also linking the article more to a specific exam question or topic, which we knew we needed to do a little more of after the evaluation of our articles.

I also completed a mini evaluation which evaluated our articles as a group so far and how effective they were. I decided that we needed a lot more statistics, data and relevant information, as well as a lot more links to specific exam questions rather than opinionated articles. (My hand written notes on this are shown below)

I also thought it would be good if someone else was to cover question 1 of the exam, as so far only Mike has begun to do this, and so far most of the articles relate to question two. Perhaps someone could help Mike with this as it is a very big task and there is a lot to write to explain to students what they need to do in detail.

Me and Matt then also started to edit our article after the feedback received from Philippa and Mike. Mikes feedback was pretty general in that it said give a brief description of when BBC iplayer etc started, and link it to a specific example in the exam.

Our topic our article is mainly linked to is the media in the online age section, although it could also slightly be linked to global media and postmodernism too, perhaps a little more information about these could also be useful in an extra paragraph.

Below are some of the pictures I took of the class working for evidence purposes, I have also uploaded these photos to Flickr for people to use on their blogs for extra evidence as well as their own.